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Memories by alem22 Memories by alem22
This is my dads awesome camera.
I would love it if someone could like, give me some constructive criticism. That would be amazing.
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My first concern was the watermark. You could work on making the opacity down a bit so it's not as visible, and maybe make it so it's not as big.
My second concern is that many head-on shots are taken witht he object dead center. The cropping or maybe how it is makes the camera look uneven. As you can see, it seems that one side has more backdrop showing than the other.
My next concern is that the lens is not in focus. The rest of the camera is, but not the lens, with is a big turn-off for me.
Then next thing I'd like to discuss is the backdrop itself. Maybe it's not purposely there, but it would look better if it was flatter and covered the whole background.
If you look there is a sunspot covering up the "f=55mm" and that looks very bright and not very attractive.
Overall, I think it is a good shot, and the editing makes it look very vintage. I think that a few things could be corrected, but otherwise, this is very neat and a very cool, old camera.
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Okay. So, I know someone already critiqued this. But. Y'know. the more the joyfuller.
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Okay, so this is my first critique.
Fist of all, vision, I'm giving 4.5. The whole thing has really beautiful colors. I think the watermark should be smaller, though. Or maybe in a different color from the piece, like a pretty blue-grey or something.

As for originality, I do see the vintage thing a lot. You did make it look good here, though. I think the originalty is pretty good though because I haven't really seen the concept before.

For technique, I'd say the photo is well taken. However, it might've been better if you adjusted the placement of the camera to make the sunlight a little less blinding to the viewer. xD Make sure you focus on what you want to be the focus of the picture. I think you could've cropped it a little less, or szoomed out a bit. Overall, your photography skills here are probably better than mine. You have a better quality camera too. XDD

Impact was very good. The concept of the photo is clear and I think overall this photo was very well executed.

Thanks for listening xD Byebye~


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Mattpwnsall Apr 19, 2012  Student Artist
Awesome memories :D

The color of the camera is very nostalgic, yet memorable at the same time, the lighting is very well placed, and the detail is spectacular :D
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ClaraEugenia Apr 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
OH MY GOD I WANT THAT CAMERA NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! JAJSDLAJDLJALDJSA
I will not write a critique because I'm NO ONE for doing that, 'cause I suck as a photographer, lol.
But I know how to appreciate epic works of art, and your photographs shows more than you think.
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alem22 Apr 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's really fun to use, the one I took a picture of. My dad let me use it the other day. xD
Have you ever tried photography? You should, I'd love to see it! :heart:
THank you so much!!!!!!!
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ClaraEugenia Apr 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I have tried, but I am not proud of what I have taken.
Thank YOU :)
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alem22 Apr 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'd love to see it!!
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ClaraEugenia Apr 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
lol, you don't want to. They really suck xD.
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alem22 Apr 4, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No really, you should!!
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ClaraEugenia Apr 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I will think about it :)
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