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Okay. So, I know someone already critiqued this. But. Y'know. the more the joyfuller.
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Okay, so this is my first critique.
Fist of all, vision, I'm giving 4.5. The whole thing has really beautiful colors. I think the watermark should be smaller, though. Or maybe in a different color from the piece, like a pretty blue-grey or something.
As for originality, I do see the vintage thing a lot. You did make it look good here, though. I think the originalty is pretty good though because I haven't really seen the concept before.
For technique, I'd say the photo is well taken. However, it might've been better if you adjusted the placement of the camera to make the sunlight a little less blinding to the viewer. xD Make sure you focus on what you want to be the focus of the picture. I think you could've cropped it a little less, or szoomed out a bit. Overall, your photography skills here are probably better than mine. You have a better quality camera too. XDD
Impact was very good. The concept of the photo is clear and I think overall this photo was very well executed.
Thanks for listening xD Byebye~
My first concern was the watermark. You could work on making the opacity down a bit so it's not as visible, and maybe make it so it's not as big.
My second concern is that many head-on shots are taken witht he object dead center. The cropping or maybe how it is makes the camera look uneven. As you can see, it seems that one side has more backdrop showing than the other.
My next concern is that the lens is not in focus. The rest of the camera is, but not the lens, with is a big turn-off for me.
Then next thing I'd like to discuss is the backdrop itself. Maybe it's not purposely there, but it would look better if it was flatter and covered the whole background.
If you look there is a sunspot covering up the "f=55mm" and that looks very bright and not very attractive.
Overall, I think it is a good shot, and the editing makes it look very vintage. I think that a few things could be corrected, but otherwise, this is very neat and a very cool, old camera.
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